It seems like forever since you started your novel. You completed a first draft, reread, revised. You tore it into pieces and put it back together again. Your critique partners have given you tons of advice, and your mother — naturally — th
inks it’s a perfect work of art.
But is your manuscript actually ready?
By ready, of course, I mean ready to submit to agents. There’s nothing more frustrating than having an agent love your query, praise your opening chapters, and then reject your completed manuscript. It happens. It happens often, in fact. Even once I’ve requested the full, there’s an excellent chance I’m still going to pass, for any number of reasons. Sometimes it becomes clear fairly early on that the first chapters got most of the attention, while the rest of the story still needs some serious work. Other times the pacing lags — the middle is dull, the characters go off in some inexplicable direction, or the elements of the story start to fall apart. Occasionally weird things start to happen and I find myself scratching my head, wondering if I mistakenly picked up a different book part way through.
The saddest rejection for me to write, however, is for the manuscript where I read from start to finish and discover it’s just not quite ready yet. Perhaps the ending was unsatisfying or anti-climactic. Or the story worked, but the writing itself feels unpolished and unprofessional. With these sorts of reading experiences, I will try to send the writer some helpful suggestions and encourage them to resubmit if they’re willing to do the work. Occasionally I see the project again, but more often I don’t.
Ideally, you will cut these problems off at the pass, long before you put your precious baby into the hands of your dream agent. One more pass through the story can make or break your chances for success. Here’s a list of things to look for when you feel like your manuscript might be finished:
- Do you start your plot early, but not so early that the reader has no idea who your protagonist is? Early action is great — and important to engage the reader — but a sense of the status quo before the events of your story is necessary as well.
- Does your protagonist experience ups and downs along the route of the story, with tension climbing toward the
climax?
- Does your protagonist have some flaws or are they too perfect? Likewise, does your antagonist have some redeeming qualities that make him/her realistic? Are these revealed through their emotions and actions?
- Is your point of view consistent throughout the book? (Meaning, do you maintain your chosen system of POV, not necessarily that you only have a single POV.) Have you kept your tenses straight throughout as well?
- Do all your characters have something they want/that motivates them, not just your protagonist and antagonist? Are these characters all distinguished from each other and necessary to the story?
- Does each scene advance your story in some important way, even sex scenes (if you have them)?
- Have you reviewed the entire manuscript for your own personal “favorites” — those words you tend to use too frequently? Have you cut out unnecessary adverbs, dialogue attributions (he screamed, she exclaimed, they questioned…), facial expressions used as filler (blinking, smiling, grinning, frowning, biting of lips, etc.)?
- Does the pacing of the story feel consistent and appropriate to the action?
- Is your conclusion satisfying? Do you tie up all the ends without relying on conveniences or coincidences? Have you left any major questions unanswered?
- Has your protagonist achieved their goal/learned his/her lesson/come out the other side of this adventure truly changed?
It often helps to set aside your completed manuscript for a few weeks before tackling this list. That way you can come at the material with fresh eyes and any issues will be more likely to jump out at you.







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This is an excellent list, and I’ll definitely have to go through my manuscript again with “Have you reviewed the entire manuscript for your own personal “favorites” — those words you tend to use too frequently? Have you cut out unnecessary adverbs, dialogue attributions (he screamed, she exclaimed, they questioned…), facial expressions used as filler (blinking, smiling, grinning, frowning, biting of lips, etc.)?” in mind. I like using facial expressions to give the readers a better image of reactions, but I need to make sure I don’t overuse them.
This list could have saved me several face palms. I queried way too soon. I’m still tweaking as we speak, but there is hope. This is wonderful advice, that should be taken seriously. Save yourself a stack of rejections, and listen.
Thanks, Nephele! This is exactly my fear as I send out the first queries this month. I’m starting to get requests for fulls, and the next few weeks will tell whether my manuscript was as ready as I’d hoped. I find your checklist most useful and specific. After reading the manuscript so many times, it’s hard to stand back objectively and see with new eyes, but the questions help immensely. -K
Thank you for posting this. It is a great checklist and right on target. The perfect reminder, not only for a final proofread prior to submission, but as the work is being written.
What a fantastic list! I think these tips are also an excellent primer to read daily, before you visit your work in progress, to avoid some of the pitfalls up front.
Great post and at the perfect time as I revise my manuscript.
Some great information here but I have a question.
Since I planning to have at least one sequel do you think I should purposely break the last rule and leave some questions unanswered so people will want to read the next book to get them?
An excellent and comprehensive list and a slow methodical process required to answer all those questions and then do something about them and then to ask them all over again. Wonderful timing, thank you.
Good question, Eric. Writing a series is a tricky thing for a first-time author because there’s no guarantee a publisher is going to want to take a risk on multiple books by an untried writer. The rule of thumb is that the first book in a potential series should also work as a stand alone title. This means that while you can hint at bigger issues that could get tackled over multiple books, it’s dangerous to have major questions left unanswered after that first volume. Note that I didn’t say you need to answer all the questions. A reader wants to have a sense of resolution at the end of the book, and not be expected to need to read another book or more to get to the end of the story. If they love book one, they’re going to want to read the next book you write, even if you haven’t left them with some sort of cliffhanger.
I was reading along thinking, “check, check, check,” until I got to “….facial expressions used as filler…”, and thought, “Hmmm”. I’m not sure when facial expressions cross the line from helpful, non-verbal emotion expression to being filler. Even so, I’ll take my instinctive pause as a sign I should go back and check.
Nepehelle,
Thank you very much for the response. I believe you’re quite right. It will be difficult but I feel I am up for the challenge. I have been reading fantasy all of my life and always did quite well in English classes at school. Several years ago I began writing articles online as a way to hone my writing skills before venturing into the world of novels and looking back on some of older works compared to what I have written recently I can’t believe how well it worked.
This is a great list. I have a MS that I’ve been playing with for the better part of seven years and I still don’t think it’s ready because of little things like this. I’ll go over it again with eyes fresh and clean and see if I can wrap it up, ready to query once and for all.
Thanks so much for this! When I pull out my “precious baby,” But Not Forgotten (Women’s Fiction), I always find something I need to tweak. Am nervous about sending it to an agent before I think it’s perfect! Sometimes I make a change that I later change back. With this list I can go over it one more time, and then maybe I will be ready to send it out! Thanks again,
Marina
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I always wondered, is it all right to have your main character die in the end?
Thanks!
Not if you’re planning a sequel! I have seen several books where main characters die in the end and it worked and many more where it didn’t. It really depends on your story if you’ve worked up to it properly.
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This post came along at just the right time. In just a few weeks, I’ll drag my manuscript back out and make those final (numerous) changes. Most likely, I’ll refer back to this article again. Thanks!
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